I guess technically I already made the decision, but I had my doubts about it. No more. Okay, well, I still have some doubts, but they’re a lot fewer than they were – to the point where they no longer count.
Like I mentioned in my previous post, I’ll be rewriting Enar’s Vacation.
Now, rewriting seems to mean different things to different people, so I’ll try and clarify a bit. What I’ll do is I’ll start with the previous version of the story as the outline, and then begin from there.
- Read through the story (almost done already) to get up to scratch with it again, and to get an idea about what state it’s in.
- Decide which parts to cut out.
- Go through the remaining parts to see what they contribute to the story and if they do it in the “right” way.
- Adjust the parts that don’t work as they should.
- Write the story.
I have a good idea of which parts to cut, and I think I know what parts don’t quite work. Most changes will likely be in the first third of the story, where the main character and the setting is introduced. A big issue with the story is that it doesn’t set up expectations for the reader very well.
It’s all nice and pleasant, but there’s no clear indication what kind of story it will be. Will it be an exciting action adventure, or a psychological thriller, or supernatural erotic escapade? It’s none of those, and it’s really just a low key story about a guy going on vacation and meeting a nice girl.
That’s hardly the norm for fantasy fiction though, and readers will be wondering when the adventure will begin, or what the threat is – or something like that.
Apart from that, there are some issues with characterization and world building that needs adjusting. I got some feedback that I was using too many cliche gender stereotypes, and while that wasn’t my intention I can see where that critique is coming from. It’ll try and sort that out.
There are also a few scenes that don’t add enough to the story. For example, readers don’t really have to know how to go about fixing a roof in a gazebo at the detail its described in the chapter where that’s happening. There are a few other similar cases, but that’s the biggest one.
The difficulty here is to not cut too much. The richness of the setting is a big part of what’s enjoyable with the story, and that’s how I want it to be. I don’t want to take away too much of that.
The rest – especially the later bits are actually pretty good. There are issues with voice and with punctuation, but other than that I’m really quite pleased with it. It shouldn’t take too much effort getting those parts up to scratch once I get there.