I wrote the first part a few months back as part of a writer’s challenge on the Mythic Scribes forums. The first part left a lot of questions unanswered, and unfortunately, so does this second part.
I’m likely to be coming back to Alene again in the future. I’ve got a lot of time invested in the character and she has a big role to play in another story I want to write. The questions will be answered, just not all at once, and not just yet – probably not even soon. Admittedly, I don’t have all the answers myself, but then again, if you’ve only read the first (or even the second) part of The Morning After, you don’t have all the questions, so maybe it evens out?
Unfortunately, I’m not particularly happy with how the second part turned out, but I’ll share it anyway. I can, if I want, rewrite it later, but I probably won’t – this particular story doesn’t feel important enough. It’s okay if it’s not as good as it could be.
It does set up for something that’ll be a rather important experience to Alene though, and I like that. She needs to calm down a bit.
Next on the list of things to do is get back to Emma’s Story. I got a few bits of feedback from a friend who read the second draft and I have some ideas on how to address the issues that were pointed out. It needs to be made more clear why it’s so important to Emma to get married. I thought I’d made it clear, but I think it needs to be anchored more securely into the world how important marriage is – both to Emma as a person and to the traditional Summer Anfylk community as a whole.
I also found a model for Toini – another character I want to write a story about. Toini is a paladin of Ek (a god of nature and life), and I’ve had some issues figuring out how she actually looks. I’ve had the basic idea for a long time, but the details have been rather vague.
Turns out that one of the barkeeps at the pub where I go for pizza every Wednesday is a near perfect fit, at least visually. She’s short and a little round, wears her hair in dreads, and likes her clothes loose and in earthy shades. If that sounds a bit like a hippie, then that’s perfectly accurate. It works really well for a paladin of a god of nature – at least in my setting.
She – Toini, the paladin – has probably changed quite a bit over the years though. Her old friends might not recognise her. She started out as a low ranking officer in the Kul Viller army. Eventually, she got promoted, joined an international peace-keeping force and then went missing in action during a mission in the jungles of the western mid-south part of the world. She’s been presumed dead ever since – several years ago.
What she’s done in the meantime, and why she’s not gotten back to her family (what’s left of it), is something I’ll explore once I get around to her story. I also need to figure it out myself first. This is far from developed and there’s a lot of questions left to ask and answer.
However, I do have a way of getting Alene and Toini to meet and join forces, but that’s a story for another time.